Pronouns can be tricky, in more ways than one. Pronouns are used to replace nouns and their purpose is to avoid repetition and make sentences easier to understand. In English, the most common ones are he, she, it, they, and this. Gender pronouns, like he or she, have become controversial in recent times. This blog is not about gender pronouns, or whether they should be used. That is a subject for another article. This article is about overuse of pronouns.
Using a pronoun helps avoid boring writing. Without them, you would have sentences like “Bob went to the store where Bob bought a drink for Bob’s sister.” However, a problem arises when there are too many of them. When recounting a story, the facts may be very clear in the writer’s head and so they overuse pronouns, not realizing that instead of making the story clearer, too many pronouns lead to confusion. Let’s look at the next paragraph.
“Shirley and her sister received an inheritance from a last will and testament of an elderly friend. She was also named as executor. She knew that her 90 year-old neighbor had made these changes to her will in her favour a few weeks before her death. She was surprised that she received a lawyer’s letter when she notified her daughter of the changes.”
There are three women in this story but is it clear which one is being referred to in these sentences? Who was named executor, Shirley or her sister? Whose daughter was notified? Only one woman is named and only once creating a lot of ambiguity. While you can re-read the paragraph carefully and guess the most likely scenario, this lack of clarity slows down comprehension.
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